tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1704877104906888774.post348440034618198479..comments2023-07-17T13:41:21.268+00:00Comments on -the sound of splinters-: grassjemhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08181038873568527264noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1704877104906888774.post-81373050929777312122013-03-27T15:37:17.927+00:002013-03-27T15:37:17.927+00:00You wouldn't believe how much I toyed with tha...You wouldn't believe how much I toyed with that phrase Bill - I decided in the end that 'glimpsed grass' sounded slightly awkward but gave the possibility of more than one glimpse. A hard call but good to know I'm chewing over the right bits!jemhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08181038873568527264noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1704877104906888774.post-64080011285948659002013-03-21T14:43:28.427+00:002013-03-21T14:43:28.427+00:00An effective fusion of image, thought, feeling. In...An effective fusion of image, thought, feeling. In line 2, you might consider "a glimpse of grass." It would give you 8 syllables, but it would, I think, flow better. Of course, flow isn't the only consideration.Billhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10717622168200846486noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1704877104906888774.post-17542968650081849072013-03-20T18:42:32.316+00:002013-03-20T18:42:32.316+00:00the process of getting over does change the perspe...the process of getting over does change the perspective...polonahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12631341810150848122noreply@blogger.com