Wednesday, 27 June 2007

silverfish



[inspired by the latest prompt at one deep breath]

11 comments:

Crafty Green Poet said...

excellent! The butterfly one is sad! Silverfish are strange creatures, your haiku makes them mysterious.

Roswila said...

Both are wonderful. I agree with crafty green poet's comments. Very evocative. Also, simply and directly worded.

Clare said...

I really liked the way you captured the feeling in each haiku. The butterflies in drawers with static wings touched my heart. And silverfish creating flashes of light is pretty.

polona said...

i agree with what others said...
the butterfly haiku touches me somewhere deep and the silverfish one is intriguing

Plain Foolish said...

I'm impressed. I'm an ex-librarian, and even I thought the silverfish were intriguing.

Mind you, I still have no use for the blighters in a library.

Sandy said...

I like these! Pared down to a few words, but totally effective.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

both of them nice -- the second one, though, gives me the creeps! I've seen those (silver fishes) before in some one's attack and it's amazing what they can destroy.

John McDonald said...

love these terrific
john

megan said...

ooooh, these are good and the contrast is perfect. drawers of coloured dust creates such an appealing image...I could see myself pulling open the drawer in a long-vacant room with slanting sun rays full of dust...then the flash of a silverfish and the drawer slammed shut. well done!

Patois said...

Can't do much but echo what's already been said. I do feel sad for the butterfly -- as I've felt sad for others' writing of the trapped fireflies. But I'm no fan of the silverfish. (The creature, that is, your haiku is great.)

Clockworkchris said...

i really enjoyed these-Silverfish are mysterious creatures. I never seem to understand why they keep coming back but my cats like them for a snack.