Thursday 13 June 2013

caught


5 comments:

mattm said...

For me, there's never too much rain (in haiku) - enjoyed this Jem, Matt

Matthew Paul said...

Completely agree, Matt. You've captured that passing sensation so well here, jem.

Bill said...

Delightful. You might try it with present tense.

jem said...

Thanks for the feedback from three giants of haiku who I admire so much!

Bill - I thought about that but I wanted to get the sense that she had been somewhere that I hadn't and bought nothing back but the smell. Present tense loses that a bit?

jo :: feather and thread said...

I love that a smell can be caught. Literally speaking or just in one's memory forever.