Wednesday, 29 August 2007

elephant

[inspired by the latest prompt at one deep breath]

12 comments:

polona said...

oh, i remember those carved elephants in tiny beans.

and the second one says so much... ouch!

Roswila said...

That first one is simply (in both senses of that word) wonderful.

Crafty Green Poet said...

oh what a wonderful treasure in the first one! The second is so sad.

Greggo said...

that second one is so sadly beautiful.

tumblewords said...

Lovely, both. Different emotions spill out of these haiku...

spacedlaw said...

I love that second one best, and its hidden tragedy.

Roswila said...

Hi Jem,

I've responded already to your ODB prompt haiku, so this is in response to a comment you left on mine re: the dreamku with a "palm sized dog" in it. (Couldn't find an email addy for you on any of your blogs, or I'd have emailed. :-D)

Yes, Alan at Summer Haiku also found the dog scary. I'm still not fully sure why. Could you go further with what is scary for you in the image?

As I responded to him, after I'd written the dreamku I noted and liked the contrast between the implied sadness of an eclipsed moon and the sweet dog right there in the palm of my hand. :-)

dandelion said...

lovely - i don't read the second one as sad somehow, maybe the promises were never meant to be kept - maybe it's better that way... I like the contradiction of a 'tiny' elephant...x

Plain Foolish said...

The tiny elephant reminded me of a tiny carved spider a friend gave me. Thank you.

The second... the feel of things slipping away...

Pearl said...

wow, stellar! Love the verbal dexterity of control and vivid observation of both.

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

Both are good, but I love the second one!

John McDonald said...

lovely stuff since I've been away
john