Thursday, 30 October 2008

stumbles

5 comments:

Spot said...

This just makes me smile - having seen seagulls trip over their own feet so many times.

polona said...

ha, great observation :)

dandelion said...

oh, i don't want to laugh, but... loving your bird-tastic run of splinters lately...x

Bill said...

This is good, jem, but I think you have two good ones here

top of the wall
a seagull
stumbles

and

top of the wall
a seagull
drops a feather

jem said...

Thanks as ever for everyone's comments.

And special thanks to Bill for taking the time to make really useful suggestions. Critical comment is always welcome and I agree with the points you've made. I think all haiku poets should have a tattoo reading 'less is more'!!!