the process of getting over does change the perspective...
An effective fusion of image, thought, feeling. In line 2, you might consider "a glimpse of grass." It would give you 8 syllables, but it would, I think, flow better. Of course, flow isn't the only consideration.
You wouldn't believe how much I toyed with that phrase Bill - I decided in the end that 'glimpsed grass' sounded slightly awkward but gave the possibility of more than one glimpse. A hard call but good to know I'm chewing over the right bits!
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